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Question:In the book, “Things Fall Apart”, by McDougal Littell, the main character, Oknokwo, is very insecure. He is scared that he might fail and turn out like his father, who was known as untrustworthy and a borrower. As a result, Oknokwo tried not to be like him in any way. He does not show any emotions nor feels for others because he believes that is a sign of weakness and he does not want to be portrayed as weak. Oknokwo only comes off harmful and bad-tempered because of his wanting to be seen as a strong man. Oknokwo tried so hard not be his father and in the end he became a failure himself but not as a poor man. He was so insecure about becoming his father so he went the exact opposite way. Oknokwo was an insecure man who was sacred of failure.

Answers:
1. Chinua Achebe wrote Things Fall Apart.

2. You need to italicize/underline the book title; quotation marks would not be correct here.

3. 2nd sentence might sound better as "who was considered untrustworthy and known as a borrower."

4. You switch between past and present tenses a few times; make sure to use only present, since this is an essay describing fiction.

5. The main character's name is spelled "Okonkwo"

6. The 6th sentence is trying to use adjectives instead of adverbs. Write instead, "Okonkwo comes across as seeming harmful, . because he wants to be seen..."
In the book, “Things Fall Apart”, by McDougal Littell, the main character, Oknokwo, is very insecure. He is afraid that he might fail (at what? insert that here) and turn out like his father, who was poor, untrustworthy and a borrower. As a result, Oknokwo tries to act very differently than his father. He does not show any emotion; nor feels compassion for others. He believes to do so is a sign of weakness and he does not want to be portrayed as weak. Oknokwo's desire to be seen as a strong man causes him to appear to be bad-tempered and dangerous. He is so insecure about becoming his father that he becomes a man who acts extremely opposite to his father. Oknokwo tries so hard not (underline the word "not" ) to be like his father that, although he becomes a rich man, he also becomes a failure in the process.

Whaddaya think?
Here's my additions/corrections to what you wrote. Hope this helps.

"In the book, “Things Fall Apart”, by McDougal Littell, the main character, Oknokwo, is very insecure. He is scared that he might fail and turn out like his father, who was known as untrustworthy and a borrower. As a result, Oknokwo tried not to be like him in any way. He does not show any emotions nor feels for others because he believes that is a sign of weakness. He does not want to be portrayed as weak. Oknokwo only comes off harmful and bad-tempered due to his desire to be seen as a strong man. Oknokwo tried so hard not be his father and in the end he became a failure himself, but not as a poor man. He was so insecure about becoming his father that he went the exact opposite way. Oknokwo was an insecure man who was scared of failure."

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