Could you correct my English grammar please. This is my bio that I will submit to a modeling agency.?

Question:Here's my bio:
My name is Sascha Seel, 27 years old and I am working as a chemist in the chemical industry.
In my leisure time, I do a lot of sports, going to the gym and snowboarding, which is my number one hobby during winter. It is one of the greatest feelings, to stay on top of the mountain with a board under your feets. Ready to beat the gravity. But I also like the sunny side of the world like Hawaii, Australia or the Caribic Islands.At my next holidays there I like to learn surfing.
A friend took me to a model casting for a fashion show. That was the first step for my "career". After that I got the changse to took some pictures for the promotion of different fashion stores in Frankfurt. In December 2006 I was one of the finalists from "Hochzeitsmodel 2007" in Berlin. Also I become the titel "Mr February" in a calendar called "just red". Till today I have been on different catwalks in Berlin and Frankfurt.
My biggest dream is to get the changse to work harder for this career

Answers:
I think it would be better if you highlight important points and make your resume point wise instead of writing long sentences.
Some spelling mistakes you can check with MSWord before submitting like Chance,title etc.
the sentence formation is ok.but there r some spelling mistakes,like chance(changse which u wrote) and title(titel).
I think u have a wonderful background and had agreat potential of the position have applied for.

But it's good that u highlight and be specific in your resume.

Like the format: Name, Address, Age, State the Working experience and others.

It's good that u can use the Standard format in making a resume.. so that ur possible employer can directly notice ur skills and potentials thru the way how u make a resume.

Good luck!

I hope this can help you!
spelling mistakes have beeen told u by someone , so wont say that but i like to mention that --- why not just categorize the information and not represent them in a para form .like
name--
date of birth---
academic qualification---
hobbies---
like this , i hope u get this ! all the best!

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