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MY LAST HOLIDAYS
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Torremolinos. My parents had reserved two rooms in a hotel which was near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the travel was very boring, I don’t stand travelling so many hours!
When we arrived to the hotel we broke up the cases and we wore the swimming costumes and quickly we went to the beach. Only we were in the beach half hour because it was later and we had to be in the hotel’s dinning room at quarter past two.
In the mornings we preferred staying in the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or in the swimming-pool.
The second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, it was very enjoy! The same day we ate in a restaurant and then I could tasted a great variety of seafood.
I thought those was my best holidays until the last day when I was swimming in the sea a jellyfish bit me. Rapidly my parents asked for help.
In spite of this I felt sad because I returned to home and I didn’t know when I came back.
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1-the journey was very boring, i can't stand travelling for such a long time!
2-when we arrived at the hotel, we unpacked the cases, put on our swimming costumes and went to the beach (putting quickly in sounds a bit strange in English- you could say 'we quickly got ready to go to the beach')
3-We only stayed at the beach for half an hour because it was getting late and we had to be ...etc
4- In the mornings, we preferred to go to the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or used the hotel's swimming pool.
5- (Not sure whether toboggan is the right translation here but in any case)- 'I really enjoyed it' Then later that day we went to a restaurant and i tried a whole range of seafood/lots of different types of seafood.
6- i thought this was my best holiday ever until the last day when i was swimming in the sea and got bitten by a jellyfish. My parents rushed to get help.
7-In spite of this, i felt sad as i had to go home and i didn't know when i was coming/could come back.
hope this helps a little!
ta luego! =)
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Torremolinos. My parents had reserved two rooms in a hotel which was near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the travel was very boring, I can’t stand travelling for so many hours!
When we arrived to the hotel we opened up the cases and we wore the swimming costumes and quickly we went to the beach. We were only on the beach half hour because it was late and we had to be in the hotel’s dining room at quarter past two.
In the mornings we preferred staying on the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or in the swimming-pool.
The second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, it was very enjoyable! The same day we ate in a restaurant and then I tasted a great variety of seafood.
I thought that was my best holidays until the last day when I was swimming in the sea and a jellyfish bit me. Rapidly my parents asked for help.
In spite of this I felt sad because I returned home and I didn’t know when I would come back.
Overall very good, the mistakes are only small.
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Torremolinos.
My parents had reserved two rooms in a hotel which was near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the journey was very boring, I don’t like travelling that many hours!
When we arrived to the hotel we unpacked our cases and we wore our swimming costumes and quickly went to the beach. we were only on the beach half hour because it was getting late and we had to be in the hotel’s dining room at quarter past two.
In the mornings we preferred staying on the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or in the swimming-pool.
The second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, i enjoyed it very much! The same day we ate in a restaurant and then I could try a great variety of seafood.
I thought this was my best holiday until the last day when I was swimming in the sea a jellyfish bit me. Rapidly my parents asked for help.
In spite of this I felt sad because I went back home and I dont know when I'll be coming back .
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Tremolos. My parents had reserved two rooms in a hotel which was near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the journey was very boring, I can't stand travelling so many hours!
When we arrived at the hotel we opened the cases and we put on our swimming costumes and quickly went to the beach. We were only on the beach half hour because it was later and we had to be in the hotel’s dinning room at quarter past two.
In the mornings we preferred staying at the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or in the swimming-pool.
The second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, we enjoyed it very much! The same day we ate in a restaurant and then I tasted a great variety of seafood.
I thought this was my best holiday until the last day when I was swimming in the sea a jellyfish bit me. My parents Quickly asked for help.
In spite of this I felt sad when I returned home because I didn’t know when I'd be coming back.
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Torremolinos. My parents had reserved two rooms in a hotel which was near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the travel was very boring, I can't stand travelling for so many hours!
When we arrived to the hotel we unpacked our cases and we put on our swimming costumes and quickly we went to the beach. We were only on the beach half hour because it was quite late and we had to be in the hotel’s dinner room at quarter past two.
In the mornings we preferred to stay on the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or in the swimming-pool.
The second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, it was very enjoyable ! The same day we had dinner in a restaurant and I tasted a great variety of seafood.
I thought this was my best holiday until on the last day when I was swimming in the sea a jellyfish bit me. Rapidly my parents asked for help.
In spite of this I felt sad because I had to return home and I didn’t know when I would come back.
Hope this is ok for you i corrected it the best i can it as very good i improved some of the sentences i think it is very well written well done x
MY LAST HOLIDAYS
Last summer me and my family decided to go to Torremolinos. My parents reserved two rooms in an hotel which was near the beach. We went to Málaga by car. The journey was very boring, I don’t like traveling for so many hours!
When we reached the hotel we opened our suitcases. We put on the swimming costumes and quickly we went to the beach. We stayed at the beach only for half an hour because we were getting delayed. We had to be in the hotel’s dinning room at quarter past two.
We preferred staying at the beach in the morning but in the afternoons we relaxed in the room or in the swimming-pool.
The second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, and enjoyed it very much! The same day we went to a restaurant where I could taste a great variety of seafood.
I was very happy thinking that it was my best holiday till the last day, when I got a bite from a jellyfish in the sea.
My parents had to rush for help. Moreover I feel sad because I don't know how I was brought back home after this.
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Please can you correct this? Then can you TELL me how improve? Do you think THIS is OK? Thanks a lot.
MY LAST HOLIDAYS
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Torremolinos. My parents had reserved two rooms in a hotel which was near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the travel was very boring, I don’t LIKE travelling FOR so many hours!
When we arrived AT the hotel we OPENED OUR cases and we wore the swimming costumes and quickly we went to the beach. WE WERE ONLY On the beach FOR half AN hour because it was GETTING LATE and we had to be in the hotel’s dinning room at quarter past two.
In the mornings we preferred staying ON the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or in the swimming-pool.
The second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, it was very enjoyABLE The same day we ate in a restaurant and I c tasted a great variety of seafood.
I thought THIS was my best holiday until the last day when I was swimming in the sea a jellyfish bit me. QUICKLY my parents asked for help.
In spite of this I felt sad because WHEN I returned home and I didn’t know when I WOULD GO back.
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Tremolos. My parents had reserved two rooms in an hotel which was near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the journey was very boring, I can't stand travelling for so many hours!
When we arrived at the hotel we opened up our cases, put on our swimming costumes and went quickly to the beach. We were only at the beach for about half hour as it was getting late, we needed to be at the hotel dinning room by quarter past two.
During the mornings we preferred to stay at the beach and in the afternoon we would rest in our room or relax at the swimming-pool.
On the second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, it was very enjoyable! That day we ate in a restaurant and were able to taste a great variety of seafood.
I thought that this was my best holiday until on the last day, when I was swimming in the sea, a jellyfish bit me. My parents very quickly called for help.
In spite of this I felt sad because once I'd returned home, I didn’t know when I would be able to go there again.
Write something else instead of "I don't stand traveling so many hours", "we opened the suitcases" instead of "we broke up the cases"...write "we put on our swimming suits and went to the beach"...it seems nicer...Write "we were the only people on the beach and we stayed for half an hour, then we went to the hotel's dining room"...Write "it was very enjoyable"..."I think this was my best holiday...but on the last day a jellyfish bit me...My parents asked rapidly for help.
well done this is really good english. in capitals i have corrected some errors so it sounds better or it uses better English.
cheers.
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Torremolinos. My parents had reserved two rooms in a hotel which WERE near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the JOURNEY was very boring, I don’t LIKE travelling so many hours!
When we arrived to the hotel we OPENED? the cases and we wore the swimming costumes and quickly we went to the beach. WE WERE ONLY AT the beach FOR half AN hour because it was LATE and we had to be in the hotel’s dinning room at quarter past two.
In the MORNING we preferred TO STAY AT the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or in the swimming-pool.
The second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, it was very ENJOYABLE?! The same day we ate in a restaurant and I tasted a great variety of seafood.
I thought IT was my best HOLIDAY until the last day when I was swimming in the sea a jellyfish bit me. my parents asked for help.
In spite of this I felt sad because I returned to home and I didn’t know when I WOULD COME back.
Last summer my family and I decided to go to Torremolinos. My parents had reserved two rooms in a hotel which was near the coast. We went to Málaga by car, the journey was very boring, I don’t like to travel for so many hours!
When we arrived at the hotel we unpacked the cases and we changed into our swimming costumes, and then quickly went to the beach. we were at the beach for only half an hour because it was late and we had to be in the hotel’s dinning room for quarter past two.
In the mornings we preferred to go to the beach but in the afternoons we rested in the room or by the swimming-pool.
On the second day we rented a boat with a toboggan, it was very fun! The same day we ate in a restaurant and where I could eat a great variety of seafood.
I thought that was my best holiday until the last day when I was swimming in the sea and a jellyfish stung me. Quickly my parents asked for help.
In spite of this I felt sad when I returned to home (*and I didn’t know when I came back.*)
* this doesn't make sense, leave it out or reword it.
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