"Families are sometime difficult to deal with. There are hard times and smooth times but family will always be there for you whenever you need them. Whenever you want them, just look around, there everywhere. A close friend, a sister or brother, whoever you need is always there."
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Try this:
"Families are sometime difficult to deal with. There are good times and bad times, but family will always be there for you when you need them. Whenever you want them, just look around, they will be there. A close friend, a sister or brother, whatever you need is always there."
Then replace whoever with whatever
I think the foster kids will feel left out
It's good but you miss-spelled the word "They're" you mean "They're everywhere"
"Families are sometime[s] difficult to deal with. There are hard times and smooth times[,] but family will always be there for you whenever you need them. Whenever you want them, just look around[;] [they're] everywhere. A close friend, a sister or brother[;] whoever you need is always there."
I just fixed the mechanical errors. They're in [].
It sounds good to me! Also thank you for not asking us to do your homework for you, there are so many students on here who would rather have us do it than to do a project on their own. I apreciate that you did your work then asked for help. This statement sounds true and honest, I doubt your teachers want more than that from you. A star for being a good student!
I edited a few small typos, and made a couple of grammar suggestions, but you have done a good job.
"Families are sometimes difficult to deal with. With family, there are hard times and smooth times, but they are always there for you when you need them. Whenever you want them, just look around, they're everywhere. A close friend, a sister or brother, whoever you need, is always there."
Good one :)
A few grammar corrections:
"Families are sometimes difficult to deal with. There are hard times and smooth times, but family will always be there for you whenever you need them. Whenever you want them, just look around; they're everywhere. A close friend, a sister or a brother, whomever you need is always there."
Well in my opinion your friend will NEVER become close as your family. Because your friends have their own family. When times where you have to choose between your blood related family members to your friends, its almost 100% that you will pick your blood related family members.
I dont know about your teacher.
And i think the shorter the quote is the better it is. But dont make it too simple, try to use more powerful words. For the second line you could tgake off the everything after times. And write "There are hard times and smooth times ". And then "However your family will always be there for you whenever you need them."
Thank you for reading.
it means family will always be there for you
Pretty good. Just change hard times and smooth times to good times and bad times. Also it should read " Whenever you need them they are everywhere" Not there or They're everywhere. You may also consider using "Need them:" instead of "want them. Good Luck!
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